A Bulbin's Diary

[ironknuckle1]

this is a story i made of TP from a Bulbin's point of view heres the link

http://zeldafanon.wikia.com/wiki/Bul-A_Bulbin's_Diary

The story is obviously fanon due to it happening in about a months time.

 

[Jetter]

it was great!!! I like the part when he says this man must be super human.

 

[Dungeon killer]

It was a great story I like it, I found no major mistakes or anything, it was a great piece of work great work.

 

[ShellShocker]

It's great how you linked everything together like when this Bulbin went with his leader and knocked out Link, like it happens in the game. Just remember to read over your writing after you finish it a few times and edit it to perfection to stop even a small amount of typos and I'm sure your writing will get even better. If it helps, you should read it out loud and get somebody else to read it too. This is because sometimes when you proof-read the text, it may sound great to you but another person may find it hard to understand. This happens to me from time to time.

Hope you take this advise and continue writing. Writing is a really fun activity for all ages.

 

[Disposable Hero]

Its pretty good man, just some spelling errors that should be fixed, but not bad at all.

 

[ironknuckle1]

thanks everyone I just fixed all the mistakes I hadn't noticed them.

 

[Gohma]

I like the part where he kills another Bulbin xD
Exactly what I could expect from a monster like this.

Great story btw, make more if you can :nod:

 

[ironknuckle1]

I just posted another that ive been working on but not finished somewhere in this fan fiction section under carnival of time

 

[Raven]

your story is inspiration! you made some very good connections with the story line of the game, i think you could be a great writer if you keep practicing.

I am struggling with a story that i want to write and may put that on hold for a zelda fanfic, maybe i will do one about redeads!!! as it would give me some space to be creative and draw ideas from it for my own story.

 

[bbudy]

good joB. i like it. the story is inspiration as Raven said.

 

[Tak]

This story is wonderful, i'd certainly like to see more like this.

It was great that you tied in all the details with the plot details of Twilight Princess, that helps to give the story more depth.

I'd recommend trying to extend your writings further, you could write an amazing story one day.

I'd also recommend reading over your story a few times, examine it thoroughly to see if it makes sense, and to weed out the spelling errors.

Overall, I rate your story an 8/10. Great, but several spelling errors let the story down.

 

[Master Kokiri 9]

Nice job knuckle! I give ya one wolf tail up (sorry I just had to do that pun). You my friend are very good at righting fanfics! *pats knuckle on back*

 

[clover]

great, you really did a good job.:wave::wave::wave:

 

[ironknuckle1]

thanks for all the compliments everyone hopefully i can make another great one

 

[Ver-go-a-go-go]

I'll admit, a vast majority of fanfics turn me off just for the reason that they aren't linked to the main game that they're based on. Like, sequels to MM that never really happened you know? I just don't really find entertainment in that. But you really appealed to me in two ways: 1.) You kept it short. I don't like reading a long story on the computer to tell the truth, and 2.) You made plenty of references to the main game to keep me interested. I may be way too picky when it comes to this thing, and I may not appreciate the "finer" types of it, but I did like yours.