Din Akera
Sniper
- Joined
- Jan 27, 2010
- Location
- My own little world
Alright, I just want to say thank-you for all of your patience. I know I made you all wait. I wanted to have more than just the prologue and chapter one for all of you this first time I posted. So...
This is 'The Wanderers' reworked. You will recognize lots of it, but it is important if you want the full effect of the rework, that you read it new in it's entirety. There has been lots of little changes that will cause there to be big changes later on.
I also wanted to say thank-you to all of you that have been following my story for the last few months. I am very appreciative of all of you. Through this prosess of informing you all that I am restarting the story, I learned that I have many silent followers. Please, everyone. Leave feedback. It is extremely helpful to me. It helps me improve my writing or even give me that extra bit of encouragement to keep going on it. If you want more, tell me that you want more. ^^
So, without further delay, I give you the revised version of "The Wanderers" written by Din Akera.
---------- Post added at 09:05 AM ---------- Previous post was at 08:58 AM ----------
Prologue:
The stone room was dark, cold, and damp. Mold grew in the cracks between the bricks of the walls and water droplets fell in random patterns from the ceiling. A set of ruby red eyes scanned the small dark space. His hands, clasped tightly in shackles, rubbed against the opposite walls of the room. His knuckles had been rubbed raw from the amount of time they spent scraping against the stone. The shackles holding his arms angled awkwardly up above his head, held the majority of his weight. This position caused his shoulders to ache. The wooden plank holding his spine straight pushed splinters into his back and held the cold metal bands around his hips and ankles tightly in place. The foot of empty space from the floor to his feet was wet with sweat and droplets of blood from the bondage digging into his skin. The metal collar around his throat had three large spikes that pressed hard into his throat if he even flexed the muscles in his neck.
The man closed his eyes and hung his head. This crucifixion position prevented any movement except that. The cell held nothing but this man with ruby red eyes and his harsh restraints. He was growing weaker after all this time suspended and suppressed in the cell.
The man heard something he had not in a long while, footsteps. He tilted his head to the side and opened his left eye to see orange light coming down the corridor. With light on the other side the bars at the front of the cell, straight shadows were thrown across the floor inside the cramped space. The light also showed the additional restraints, ones not visible in the darkness. Two green translucent spheres covered the man’s hands and sealed off around his wrists. The prisoner was surrounded by the green translucent hue. It made a screen over the floor, ceiling and walls of the cell. The light came closer and eventually three Gerudo guards appeared behind the bars of the cell. The women wore the tradition purple of guard rank and each held the preferred weapon of Gerudo guards, long pikes.
“Alright newby. Go for it, we got your back.” One of the guards teased.
The guard closest to the door opened one bar in the front of the cell and passed through the green barrier.
The man with the red eyes showed little interest but one corner of his mouth turned up in a smirk. Newby.
The woman approached the prisoner and held up a flask. She put it to his lips and he drank. Once the last drop of the fluid had entered his throat he lurched in his restrains and growled at her. The guard jumped back and fell to her butt on the stone floor. The man hadn’t moved more than two inches, for his bondages wouldn’t allow it, but he had scared her good. The man chuckled to himself; this was his only entertainment. Outside the cell, the other two women were laughing at the new guard. She got to her feet with a furrowed brow and hung her head low. She stalked out of the cell and replaced the bar. The three left the prisoner, now fed, once again in darkness.
The man glanced down to where the woman had fallen, a spot catching his eye. He could see something sparkle in the vanishing light. The light grew dimmer and then disappeared completely. He waited for his eyes to adjust to the blackness once again. The sparkle was a small jewel. Looking down harder at the spot he saw that it was indeed a circular piece of jewelry, a bracelet, which must have slid off of the woman’s wrist when she fell. The bracelet had several beads on it, but more to the prisoner’s attention were four pointed bones, that looked to be the teeth of a beast. Something moved inside the prisoner and thousands of thoughts ran through his mind. Could he do it?
The man looked straight forward toward the bars and concentrated hard. The prisoner’s body began to grow, his neck expanding and pressing into the spikes. The man tried to ignore this pain and focus lower on his body. From between the base of his shirt and the hem of his pants grew a black tail. The man focused hard on the tail and tried desperately to shrink the size of his neck while still grow the tail. The spikes began to dig through his skin and draw blood. The spikes drove through the skin and into the muscles of his neck. The pain was growing exponentially. The man’s tail grew to be quite long. He swung it around the wooden post and brought the tip of it forward. The end of his tail touched the bracelet and began to drag it across the floor, closer. The prisoner angled his tail and pressed the piece of jewelry up against the base of the post. It bent and he got the end of his tail through the hole in the center. He picked it up and carefully wrapped the end of his tail around one of the pointed teeth. He brought the tooth up to the clasp on the back of the spiked collar causing him the excruciating pain. By feel, he was able to find the lock. Carefully the man got the end of the tooth inside the lock. He felt around and turned the tooth one way and then the other.
After what seemed like hours the man heard a small click. The man’s stomach leapt into his chest. The pressure around his neck relaxed. Looking down in disbelief the prisoner let the bracelet slide farther down his tail. With the tip of the black tail the man grabbed the collar and pulled. It came off and clattered to the ground beside him. The man’s eyes lit up with determination and excitement. His neck and body grew larger to a point where he was no longer fighting to keep the tail active. Taking several deep breaths, the man waited until the pain died and the blood slowed.
The man slid the bracelet to the end of his tail once again and set to work on the lock of his right wrist. When the lock sprang open the prisoner grabbed his tool with his hand. The green sphere seemed to bend and allow him to hold the tooth with the barrier between his fingers and the tool. Looking to the left, he stretched to reach the other wrist and began to work that lock. Once both hands were free the man took another deep breath. His tail retracted and his body and neck shrank to normal size. He used the teeth on the bracelet to open the locks on the metal bars around his hips and ankles much more swiftly, now that he was able to use his hands. The man jumped down off the wooden post to the blood and swear soaked floor. With a giant stretch the man cracked his stiff joints and sighed. His face turned toward the green hue over the bars of the cell and he looked down at the spheres covering his hands. The prisoner thought for a minute. Around his fingertips, inside the green spheres, black particles began to form, but yellow sparkles sprang from the inside of the spheres and the black speckles disappeared instantly.
“Hm.” The sound was that of a question. Then, the man smirked and his body began to grow again. The long tail stretched out from his back and wrapped around over to his right hand. The same black particles formed around the tip of the tail. Yellow sparkles appeared from the walls of the cell, but took half a second to cross the space and dispel the black ones. With a confident noise the man stood in the very center of the cell and held the tip of his tail one inch from the outside of the sphere. Quickly the black particles appeared, but before the yellow sparkles could reach them, the black ones touched the outside of the green sphere and it popped. The man looked at his hand, stunned for a minute. Realization then dawned on his face. He held his now free hand above the sphere covering his other hand and popped it as well.
A chuckle escaped the man’s throat and a huge smile spread across his face. Crossing over to the bars the man looked as far down the corridor as he could, but could see nothing. Turning to look the other way he could see another cell across the way, on the opposite side of the hall. Straining his eyes hard in the darkness, he could see what he had been hoping for.
“I don’t believe it.” His words came out in a barely audible whisper and he shook his head slowly from side to side. The man raised one hand and sharply flicked his fingers upward. Inside the other cell an object jumped off the wall and floated midair. The man bent his wrist slowly and the object floated up to the bars. Turning his wrist from side to side, the object rotated on the spot and was able to pass through the bars. The floating sword came down the corridor and hovered on the outside of the green barrier. The black and silver sword responded to every movement of the man’s hand. Backing away from the barrier the man once again created the black particles around his fingertips. When he did, the tip of the sword copied this action as well. The yellow particles attacked the black ones on the inside of the cell but not those on the outside. The man moved the tip of the sword to touch the outside of the barrier and it too popped and disappeared.
“Hm!” This time the sound was confident and victorious. The man moved to the bars and reached though grabbing his sword. He strung it to his belt and reached his hand through the bars back toward the other cell. With movements of his hands the man was able to bring each piece of his silver and black armor into his cell and assemble it in place on his body.
The man looked down at himself after he’d finished tying his second arm guard in place, the last piece of his beloved armor. He smiled proudly, he hadn’t felt this good in so many years. Looking up at the bars, he held up both hands and the black particles enveloped his whole hands, turning into black and purple balls. The man wound up and shot one ball from each hand at the bars of the cell. The balls turned into beams of black and purple magic. The bars and the stonewall opposite them, exploded and disappeared completely with the impact of the black magic. The loud bang shook the building and the walls in line with the beams crumbled. Sunlight shone in though the now gaping hole and the man took off at a full run for the outside world.
(End Prologue)
This is 'The Wanderers' reworked. You will recognize lots of it, but it is important if you want the full effect of the rework, that you read it new in it's entirety. There has been lots of little changes that will cause there to be big changes later on.
I also wanted to say thank-you to all of you that have been following my story for the last few months. I am very appreciative of all of you. Through this prosess of informing you all that I am restarting the story, I learned that I have many silent followers. Please, everyone. Leave feedback. It is extremely helpful to me. It helps me improve my writing or even give me that extra bit of encouragement to keep going on it. If you want more, tell me that you want more. ^^
So, without further delay, I give you the revised version of "The Wanderers" written by Din Akera.
---------- Post added at 09:05 AM ---------- Previous post was at 08:58 AM ----------
Prologue:
The stone room was dark, cold, and damp. Mold grew in the cracks between the bricks of the walls and water droplets fell in random patterns from the ceiling. A set of ruby red eyes scanned the small dark space. His hands, clasped tightly in shackles, rubbed against the opposite walls of the room. His knuckles had been rubbed raw from the amount of time they spent scraping against the stone. The shackles holding his arms angled awkwardly up above his head, held the majority of his weight. This position caused his shoulders to ache. The wooden plank holding his spine straight pushed splinters into his back and held the cold metal bands around his hips and ankles tightly in place. The foot of empty space from the floor to his feet was wet with sweat and droplets of blood from the bondage digging into his skin. The metal collar around his throat had three large spikes that pressed hard into his throat if he even flexed the muscles in his neck.
The man closed his eyes and hung his head. This crucifixion position prevented any movement except that. The cell held nothing but this man with ruby red eyes and his harsh restraints. He was growing weaker after all this time suspended and suppressed in the cell.
The man heard something he had not in a long while, footsteps. He tilted his head to the side and opened his left eye to see orange light coming down the corridor. With light on the other side the bars at the front of the cell, straight shadows were thrown across the floor inside the cramped space. The light also showed the additional restraints, ones not visible in the darkness. Two green translucent spheres covered the man’s hands and sealed off around his wrists. The prisoner was surrounded by the green translucent hue. It made a screen over the floor, ceiling and walls of the cell. The light came closer and eventually three Gerudo guards appeared behind the bars of the cell. The women wore the tradition purple of guard rank and each held the preferred weapon of Gerudo guards, long pikes.
“Alright newby. Go for it, we got your back.” One of the guards teased.
The guard closest to the door opened one bar in the front of the cell and passed through the green barrier.
The man with the red eyes showed little interest but one corner of his mouth turned up in a smirk. Newby.
The woman approached the prisoner and held up a flask. She put it to his lips and he drank. Once the last drop of the fluid had entered his throat he lurched in his restrains and growled at her. The guard jumped back and fell to her butt on the stone floor. The man hadn’t moved more than two inches, for his bondages wouldn’t allow it, but he had scared her good. The man chuckled to himself; this was his only entertainment. Outside the cell, the other two women were laughing at the new guard. She got to her feet with a furrowed brow and hung her head low. She stalked out of the cell and replaced the bar. The three left the prisoner, now fed, once again in darkness.
The man glanced down to where the woman had fallen, a spot catching his eye. He could see something sparkle in the vanishing light. The light grew dimmer and then disappeared completely. He waited for his eyes to adjust to the blackness once again. The sparkle was a small jewel. Looking down harder at the spot he saw that it was indeed a circular piece of jewelry, a bracelet, which must have slid off of the woman’s wrist when she fell. The bracelet had several beads on it, but more to the prisoner’s attention were four pointed bones, that looked to be the teeth of a beast. Something moved inside the prisoner and thousands of thoughts ran through his mind. Could he do it?
The man looked straight forward toward the bars and concentrated hard. The prisoner’s body began to grow, his neck expanding and pressing into the spikes. The man tried to ignore this pain and focus lower on his body. From between the base of his shirt and the hem of his pants grew a black tail. The man focused hard on the tail and tried desperately to shrink the size of his neck while still grow the tail. The spikes began to dig through his skin and draw blood. The spikes drove through the skin and into the muscles of his neck. The pain was growing exponentially. The man’s tail grew to be quite long. He swung it around the wooden post and brought the tip of it forward. The end of his tail touched the bracelet and began to drag it across the floor, closer. The prisoner angled his tail and pressed the piece of jewelry up against the base of the post. It bent and he got the end of his tail through the hole in the center. He picked it up and carefully wrapped the end of his tail around one of the pointed teeth. He brought the tooth up to the clasp on the back of the spiked collar causing him the excruciating pain. By feel, he was able to find the lock. Carefully the man got the end of the tooth inside the lock. He felt around and turned the tooth one way and then the other.
After what seemed like hours the man heard a small click. The man’s stomach leapt into his chest. The pressure around his neck relaxed. Looking down in disbelief the prisoner let the bracelet slide farther down his tail. With the tip of the black tail the man grabbed the collar and pulled. It came off and clattered to the ground beside him. The man’s eyes lit up with determination and excitement. His neck and body grew larger to a point where he was no longer fighting to keep the tail active. Taking several deep breaths, the man waited until the pain died and the blood slowed.
The man slid the bracelet to the end of his tail once again and set to work on the lock of his right wrist. When the lock sprang open the prisoner grabbed his tool with his hand. The green sphere seemed to bend and allow him to hold the tooth with the barrier between his fingers and the tool. Looking to the left, he stretched to reach the other wrist and began to work that lock. Once both hands were free the man took another deep breath. His tail retracted and his body and neck shrank to normal size. He used the teeth on the bracelet to open the locks on the metal bars around his hips and ankles much more swiftly, now that he was able to use his hands. The man jumped down off the wooden post to the blood and swear soaked floor. With a giant stretch the man cracked his stiff joints and sighed. His face turned toward the green hue over the bars of the cell and he looked down at the spheres covering his hands. The prisoner thought for a minute. Around his fingertips, inside the green spheres, black particles began to form, but yellow sparkles sprang from the inside of the spheres and the black speckles disappeared instantly.
“Hm.” The sound was that of a question. Then, the man smirked and his body began to grow again. The long tail stretched out from his back and wrapped around over to his right hand. The same black particles formed around the tip of the tail. Yellow sparkles appeared from the walls of the cell, but took half a second to cross the space and dispel the black ones. With a confident noise the man stood in the very center of the cell and held the tip of his tail one inch from the outside of the sphere. Quickly the black particles appeared, but before the yellow sparkles could reach them, the black ones touched the outside of the green sphere and it popped. The man looked at his hand, stunned for a minute. Realization then dawned on his face. He held his now free hand above the sphere covering his other hand and popped it as well.
A chuckle escaped the man’s throat and a huge smile spread across his face. Crossing over to the bars the man looked as far down the corridor as he could, but could see nothing. Turning to look the other way he could see another cell across the way, on the opposite side of the hall. Straining his eyes hard in the darkness, he could see what he had been hoping for.
“I don’t believe it.” His words came out in a barely audible whisper and he shook his head slowly from side to side. The man raised one hand and sharply flicked his fingers upward. Inside the other cell an object jumped off the wall and floated midair. The man bent his wrist slowly and the object floated up to the bars. Turning his wrist from side to side, the object rotated on the spot and was able to pass through the bars. The floating sword came down the corridor and hovered on the outside of the green barrier. The black and silver sword responded to every movement of the man’s hand. Backing away from the barrier the man once again created the black particles around his fingertips. When he did, the tip of the sword copied this action as well. The yellow particles attacked the black ones on the inside of the cell but not those on the outside. The man moved the tip of the sword to touch the outside of the barrier and it too popped and disappeared.
“Hm!” This time the sound was confident and victorious. The man moved to the bars and reached though grabbing his sword. He strung it to his belt and reached his hand through the bars back toward the other cell. With movements of his hands the man was able to bring each piece of his silver and black armor into his cell and assemble it in place on his body.
The man looked down at himself after he’d finished tying his second arm guard in place, the last piece of his beloved armor. He smiled proudly, he hadn’t felt this good in so many years. Looking up at the bars, he held up both hands and the black particles enveloped his whole hands, turning into black and purple balls. The man wound up and shot one ball from each hand at the bars of the cell. The balls turned into beams of black and purple magic. The bars and the stonewall opposite them, exploded and disappeared completely with the impact of the black magic. The loud bang shook the building and the walls in line with the beams crumbled. Sunlight shone in though the now gaping hole and the man took off at a full run for the outside world.
(End Prologue)