Sarianae
Infinite Dreamer
- Joined
- Nov 21, 2010
- Location
- Storybrooke, Maine
Hmmm...this is my first venture into the Fan Works section of the forum~ ^^
A few months ago, I was telling someone how I had recently taken up an interest in poetry. When they asked me what inspired me to write, the first thing that jumped into my head was Zelda. I didn't say it out loud because I thought that would garner me a reaction that was either...shocked, confused, or simply livid, but anyways I've been working on the poem you will be reading below since about that time. Yes....it's been undergoing revision and more revision for a while. I seriously can't look at it anymore...I need other people's opinions at this point because I've just been staring at it too long. I also realized yesterday that I'd memorized it by accident, and was surprised to find that I could recite the whole thing with ease....that's weird because it's a fairly long poem, almost 80 lines (yeah, I spent a really long time writing it.... ) Anyway, I am very interested in hearing what you're opinions of it will be.
The name of this Poem is World End Dominator, inspired by a completely unrelated song from a completely unrelated series with the same name. I might actually change the name though, because World End Dominator sounds like a name more perfectly fit for a Majora's Mask poem, which this one is not. Maybe I will write an MM poem with that name and change this one to something else....but this is the name of this poem for now.
Now, I will not be telling you the subject of the poem, because if I have indeed succeeded in writing it, the scene described within the poem should be naturally formulated by clear images infiltrating your mind as you read. I will say however that the poem covers a very specific scene of a very specific game. You should be able to figure it out...hopefully. If you can't, that either means, I, as the writer, have failed in my endeavor to write you all this poem, or it means you didn't read it carefully enough...or maybe both.
One more thing: I recommend putting on some mood music for this. I was listening to Two Steps From Hell while writing it so you could go for that....or you could just pick any fairly intense song you know, because yes, this poem is meant to be read with a high intensity.
Anyway, without further ado, please go ahead and read!
*Note: Supremeer is not a word. I made it up because I thought it better fit the rhythmic constraints of the line. It equals Supreme Master.
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World End Dominator
Lock dead on my eyes with your wickedest scorn,
Smash your fist upon the shattering floor,
And flaunting your cape in haughtiest laughter,
Come test me see if I run for the door.
Taunting and haunting supremeer* of the stage,
Emerging before me in tyrannical glory,
Rise to claim your elevated place,
In the coming of the close of this enduring story.
Yet—sinister sovereign stranger to fear,
I bid you a warning you would do well to hear:
Ye darkest of kings, watch your guard.
By you this match shall not be made;
All shall be decided come one fateful moment,
Governed in a motion of my merciless blade.
Bare me of my closest companion,
Thieve me of my love,
Yet pride a fool’s confidence and be lead astray;
No princess shall you long hold hostage,
No friend shall you long hold at bay.
And know that every spirit you’ve tormented in Hyrule,
Empowers the nemesis sword you shall be meeting today.
Wielding your trident of power, make no mistake—
Din is no master of Farore;
They eye each other critically,
With a fierceness of equal intensity,
Descent here from the heavens so high,
Manifest now in you and I.
You may pummel the platforms,
You may gloat upon the air, basking in the cover of invincible wear,
Yet underestimation is a most cunning enemy to avoid in this lair.
Punishing ye who knows not to duly steer clear,
Devouring arrogant prey from an unsuspecting rear.
Then—do regard me so coolly, dare be so foolhardy,
Unwise by the absence of any slight foreboding fear;
And ye prisoner name to your traitorous hubris,
I shall exploit your every weakness drawing dangerously near.
Oh lord of the malice that plagues this world, heed that which I have to say;
Beware of whom stands before you on this fated day.
Take heed of the sun glowing unmercifully,
Through the blaze of my eyes in their most dangerous ferocity,
Watching every tear in your cape with a vigilance to beware,
Stealing every opportunity to strike that I dare.
Throw me what you will with Din’s aid;
Farore rejects your every bout by the spins of my blade.
Time laughs at your endless rally,
Death creeps closer by an arrow’s defining glow.
Feel no surprise at your continual descent before me;
Savour the taste of this delicious last blow.
Come point blank my judicial comrade evil long hath verily feared,
I shall hear you curse the day long ago you first stared down your nose and for what you saw sneered;
Seven years nigh on your raven horse so high,
Witnessed by the tumultuous crashing thunder and rain,
Dismissed the green youth before you but in petty disdain;
Only thrown to the ground as you rode on away,
So do you seal your fate to me on this day.
This world shall not miss you.
This final strike draws in name of every last soul.
Yet ragged and choking forth crimson,
Draw twinges of my pity at the brink of this goal.
Sorely shocked eyes hold mine own paralyzed,
Condemned upon who’s wretched kneeling figure withstands misery to lay,
Down the flesh at the verge of my blade must I grimace,
—Yet before you I shall not ever now sway.
To the heir of Hyrulian hell,
This is your final farewell.
And raising this gleaming sword so high in sublimity—
Deal one divine slice in yet cruelest of grace,
Force you fall before me in crispest finality,
And last purge you forth of this world’s weary face.
Oh ye who fate forever forbids me befriend,
What I may present you is only this end;
Until the heavens demand our souls once again meet,
May you rest peacefully sealed beneath the might in these feet;
May you slumber ever unstirred to new battle heat.
Determined is the dominator that contends,
This deathly date of ours ends.
So do I leave you to the goddesses in lieu—
So hear me whisper you this single last word—
—Adieu.
/World End Dominator
Constructive criticism is welcome! I know there are some lines here and there that need rhythm work, and if anyone has suggestions on how to improve them, that'd be great. Perhaps there are words here and there that don't work as well as they should....there might be other things that I could improve upon as well. I definitely appreciate suggestions from other people, as I'm pretty brain-dead from contemplating it too long myself. :silent:
Let me know what you think!
(P.S. Did 'verily' happen to bring to mind any other particular scene...? ^^)
A few months ago, I was telling someone how I had recently taken up an interest in poetry. When they asked me what inspired me to write, the first thing that jumped into my head was Zelda. I didn't say it out loud because I thought that would garner me a reaction that was either...shocked, confused, or simply livid, but anyways I've been working on the poem you will be reading below since about that time. Yes....it's been undergoing revision and more revision for a while. I seriously can't look at it anymore...I need other people's opinions at this point because I've just been staring at it too long. I also realized yesterday that I'd memorized it by accident, and was surprised to find that I could recite the whole thing with ease....that's weird because it's a fairly long poem, almost 80 lines (yeah, I spent a really long time writing it.... ) Anyway, I am very interested in hearing what you're opinions of it will be.
The name of this Poem is World End Dominator, inspired by a completely unrelated song from a completely unrelated series with the same name. I might actually change the name though, because World End Dominator sounds like a name more perfectly fit for a Majora's Mask poem, which this one is not. Maybe I will write an MM poem with that name and change this one to something else....but this is the name of this poem for now.
Now, I will not be telling you the subject of the poem, because if I have indeed succeeded in writing it, the scene described within the poem should be naturally formulated by clear images infiltrating your mind as you read. I will say however that the poem covers a very specific scene of a very specific game. You should be able to figure it out...hopefully. If you can't, that either means, I, as the writer, have failed in my endeavor to write you all this poem, or it means you didn't read it carefully enough...or maybe both.
One more thing: I recommend putting on some mood music for this. I was listening to Two Steps From Hell while writing it so you could go for that....or you could just pick any fairly intense song you know, because yes, this poem is meant to be read with a high intensity.
Anyway, without further ado, please go ahead and read!
*Note: Supremeer is not a word. I made it up because I thought it better fit the rhythmic constraints of the line. It equals Supreme Master.
_____________________________________
World End Dominator
Lock dead on my eyes with your wickedest scorn,
Smash your fist upon the shattering floor,
And flaunting your cape in haughtiest laughter,
Come test me see if I run for the door.
Taunting and haunting supremeer* of the stage,
Emerging before me in tyrannical glory,
Rise to claim your elevated place,
In the coming of the close of this enduring story.
Yet—sinister sovereign stranger to fear,
I bid you a warning you would do well to hear:
Ye darkest of kings, watch your guard.
By you this match shall not be made;
All shall be decided come one fateful moment,
Governed in a motion of my merciless blade.
Bare me of my closest companion,
Thieve me of my love,
Yet pride a fool’s confidence and be lead astray;
No princess shall you long hold hostage,
No friend shall you long hold at bay.
And know that every spirit you’ve tormented in Hyrule,
Empowers the nemesis sword you shall be meeting today.
Wielding your trident of power, make no mistake—
Din is no master of Farore;
They eye each other critically,
With a fierceness of equal intensity,
Descent here from the heavens so high,
Manifest now in you and I.
You may pummel the platforms,
You may gloat upon the air, basking in the cover of invincible wear,
Yet underestimation is a most cunning enemy to avoid in this lair.
Punishing ye who knows not to duly steer clear,
Devouring arrogant prey from an unsuspecting rear.
Then—do regard me so coolly, dare be so foolhardy,
Unwise by the absence of any slight foreboding fear;
And ye prisoner name to your traitorous hubris,
I shall exploit your every weakness drawing dangerously near.
Oh lord of the malice that plagues this world, heed that which I have to say;
Beware of whom stands before you on this fated day.
Take heed of the sun glowing unmercifully,
Through the blaze of my eyes in their most dangerous ferocity,
Watching every tear in your cape with a vigilance to beware,
Stealing every opportunity to strike that I dare.
Throw me what you will with Din’s aid;
Farore rejects your every bout by the spins of my blade.
Time laughs at your endless rally,
Death creeps closer by an arrow’s defining glow.
Feel no surprise at your continual descent before me;
Savour the taste of this delicious last blow.
Come point blank my judicial comrade evil long hath verily feared,
I shall hear you curse the day long ago you first stared down your nose and for what you saw sneered;
Seven years nigh on your raven horse so high,
Witnessed by the tumultuous crashing thunder and rain,
Dismissed the green youth before you but in petty disdain;
Only thrown to the ground as you rode on away,
So do you seal your fate to me on this day.
This world shall not miss you.
This final strike draws in name of every last soul.
Yet ragged and choking forth crimson,
Draw twinges of my pity at the brink of this goal.
Sorely shocked eyes hold mine own paralyzed,
Condemned upon who’s wretched kneeling figure withstands misery to lay,
Down the flesh at the verge of my blade must I grimace,
—Yet before you I shall not ever now sway.
To the heir of Hyrulian hell,
This is your final farewell.
And raising this gleaming sword so high in sublimity—
Deal one divine slice in yet cruelest of grace,
Force you fall before me in crispest finality,
And last purge you forth of this world’s weary face.
Oh ye who fate forever forbids me befriend,
What I may present you is only this end;
Until the heavens demand our souls once again meet,
May you rest peacefully sealed beneath the might in these feet;
May you slumber ever unstirred to new battle heat.
Determined is the dominator that contends,
This deathly date of ours ends.
So do I leave you to the goddesses in lieu—
So hear me whisper you this single last word—
—Adieu.
/World End Dominator
Constructive criticism is welcome! I know there are some lines here and there that need rhythm work, and if anyone has suggestions on how to improve them, that'd be great. Perhaps there are words here and there that don't work as well as they should....there might be other things that I could improve upon as well. I definitely appreciate suggestions from other people, as I'm pretty brain-dead from contemplating it too long myself. :silent:
Let me know what you think!
(P.S. Did 'verily' happen to bring to mind any other particular scene...? ^^)
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