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General Art Musicfan's Poetry

Musicfan

the shadow mage
Joined
Mar 6, 2011
Location
insanity
Life
A small leaf falls from the tree,
The leaf wishes to go back to the top,
but is unable to reach it as it falls.
Just as the leaf skims the ground
The wind begins to blow.
The leaf became satisfied near the top.
I do not need the wind
The leaf declared
The wind sudenly stoped
The leaf began to plummet
It reached touched ground,
The forest began to trample it
It was grueling to the leaf,
It believed that nothing would help
Days pass the leaf looks up at the tree
The leaf asked the wind for help
The leaf was humbled
"I thought you did not need me to reach the top"
"I can not do it on my own"
The leaf said to the wind
The wind began to blow​

Leve coments construtive criticism and sujetions for subjecs.
 
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I've never had anything against free verse, but this is kind of unbalanced, like writing with enters in between at certain intervals. This could easily be fixed with a few minor word changes, this is really a great poem with a deep meaning. Nice job.
 

Musicfan

the shadow mage
Joined
Mar 6, 2011
Location
insanity
Magnetic Contradictions
Fire warmth and comfert
Fire death and destrution

People smart and kind
People stupid and apathetic

Water beauty and calm
Water killer and devistation
(I will add more to this one it is incomplet also thank you to blackice_cc with help with the title)
 
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Musicfan

the shadow mage
Joined
Mar 6, 2011
Location
insanity
Cramming
There is always something more that can be learned,
Some of it useful, some of it intresting.

It is imposible to learn every thing with your eyes,
It is imposible to learn every thing with your ears,
It is imposible to learn every thing with your nose,
It is imposible to learn every thing with your hands,
It is imposible to learn every thing with your mouth,

You would miss out on every experiance you have
Missing any sense even what you take for granted,
While eating an apple
you would miss the waxy textuer
You would miss the sweet sent
You would miss the rich and juciy taste
You would miss the crunch as you take a bite
You would mis the read sheen of the apple

You can not enjoy life rushing all the time
You can not learn every thing with yourself.
 

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