Majora's Mask Real Story

[@lex MM]

Okay, this is a story I wrote based on Majora's Mask. Ah, well,, it is Majora's Mask but a lot diffrent.... So...here's Episode 1 and 2...I hope you'll laugh....:wave:

Episode 1

Link: I think I must meet Zelda one more time before I go to Wind WakerD)*taking Epona*
Link:So...I must pass through the Lost Woods, huh? Easy.

5 minutes later
Link: Weird, I got lost in the Lost woods. Very weird.*Hears something similar to Navi's flying*Oh, no. Navi again. I should find a way to get out of here!*looks around*
Tatl: What's up, Tael?
Tael: Look at there! A boy with a green tunic!
Tatl: He seems a little stupid. Easy target.
Tael: Let's hit his horse.
*Link falls down*
Tatl: Now what?
Tael: I guess we just wait for Skull Kid...
Skull kid: What's up, fairies?
Tael: We...found someone.
Skull Kid: I think I know him. Ah, yes! He is that...famous actor!
Tatl: I think he's the boy who taught you "that" song in the woods...
Skull Kid: No. He's an actor.
Tatl: If you say so....
Skull Kid: Look what I found!
Tael: What?
Skull Kid: A nice horse! And an ocarina...
Tael: Can i touch it?
Skull Kid: Nope.
Tatl: Watch out! He's awake!
Link: What are you doing here?
Skull Kid: Well.....I'm a skull kid, I live in Lost woods!
Link: Do you really think that I'm so stupid?
Tatl: Well...yeah.
Link: Just give me my ocarina.
Skull kid: Not so easy!*goes away with Epona*
Link: Oh, no!! A skull kid with a weird mask took my ocarina! That means.....an other game to finish? Come on!
Okay, that was episode 1 and here's episode 2

Episode 2
Link: What a nice tunnel...What the...? GYAAAHHHH!!!
Link: Ummm....lights please?
Skull Kid: What's up with that stupid horse of yours? It doesn't listen a word it's said to it!
Link: Yeah, do you believe that I need to play a song to make her follow me?
Skull Kid: So...I did you a favor and got rid of it.
Link: Ahhhhh....you didn't have to...
Tael: That guy is very strange."
Skull Kid: Why that sad face?
Link: You know, I really think that you should get off that mask, you can't see very well...So..let's end this, all I have to do is...
Skull Kid: Come on! Do you really think that you can beat me as I am now? Fool!
Link: Hey, what are you doing? Dekus? Wow, here's a really big one!
Skull Kid: Well, that's a good look for you!
Link: I know, I'm very pretty!
Tael: Look in the water...
Link: You....I transformed into a Deku? I know I 'm still very pretty, but....
Skull Kid: Heh, you will stay here looking that way forever!
Tael: I think we forgot something.*Door's clossing*
Tatl: Yeah, me! Tael, Skull Kid? Wait!
Link: Oh, no. Another Navi.
Tatl: It's your fault!
Link: Okay, okay, just be my partner and I will take care of it...
Tatl: Thanks...I think.
Link: Other tunnel? No, I 'm not so stupid. You go first.
Tatl: Oookaayy....See? Nothing happened.
Link: Yeah, nothing. Except we are in a tower with a giant clock and an angry mask salesman is standing next to you....

Tell me what you think but before you do this:
1#I already know that I might have some grammar mistakes
2#It's one of my first stories.....
3#Okay, maybe it wasn't so funny as I thought it would be...

 

[ChargewithSword]

The premise sounds well enough Alex but I just can't be bothered to get to the second chapter. The script function is a very ugly format to have any story and I suggest that you try to be rid of it.

 

[TreeHuggerPanda]

It's pretty good for the most part, but most budding authors use "the script form" of writing, which kinda gets on my nerves. Writing can get more sophisticated if you use a regular format, like:

Link: Weird, I got lost in the Lost woods. Very weird.*Hears something similar to Navi's flying*Oh, no. Navi again. I should find a way to get out of here!*looks around*
Tatl: What's up, Tael?
Tael: Look at there! A boy with a green tunic!
Tatl: He seems a little stupid. Easy target.
Tael: Let's hit his horse.
*Link falls down*

This could be:

"Weird," Link thought, "I got lost in the Lost Woods. Very weird." There was a familiar sound...
"Oh, no!" Link thought, "Navi again." Link was looking around for a way to get out of this place.
"What's up Tael?" A fairy said (Tael and Tatl hadn't been introduced to Link, so I wouldn't put they're names)
"Look over there!" Tael was flying around Link "A boy with a green tunic."
"He seems a little stupid." Tatl teased, "Easy target."
"Let's hit his horse." Tael suggested. Link collapsed on the ground.

I just did an example. You don't have to use my suggestion, but a format like this can be more sophisticated than a "script format."

 

[@lex MM]

It's pretty good for the most part, but most budding authors use "the script form" of writing, which kinda gets on my nerves. Writing can get more sophisticated if you use a regular format, like:



This could be:

"Weird," Link thought, "I got lost in the Lost Woods. Very weird." There was a familiar sound...
"Oh, no!" Link thought, "Navi again." Link was looking around for a way to get out of this place.
"What's up Tael?" A fairy said (Tael and Tatl hadn't been introduced to Link, so I wouldn't put they're names)
"Look over there!" Tael was flying around Link "A boy with a green tunic."
"He seems a little stupid." Tatl teased, "Easy target."
"Let's hit his horse." Tael suggested. Link collapsed on the ground.

I just did an example. You don't have to use my suggestion, but a format like this can be more sophisticated than a "script format."

You're right...I was afraid for my grammar mistakes!(lol)I'll use this format to my next story(Did you thik that I'll continue this story???)
Anyway, thanks for the suggestions Charge and TreeHuggerPanta....(just to know: I write much better stories in greek lol)