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I changed my post in your story to include more in depth feedback.

ok thx for telling me im kinda new to writing and all and this will be the first book i will be writing.

The reason I can't understand your story is because I can't tell who is speaking. It makes more sense to me when you write Saria said "Bla bla bla bla bla". Link, in confusion, assumed an angry look and said "WELL bla bla bla bla bla!!"

i now edited a better part of the story so be sure to check it out

everyone be sure to check out my book im working on its not a very great part in it but if you want to hear another just comment ill be able to get to you next week on friday

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